Metaphors are the joy of us all and they are the gifts we share with each other. Today, a friend shares a bag of metaphors for us. Shall we dig in?
@itz_bigboiler’s words:
The cool breeze of the sylph Afrosays swooped a pollen grain towards me
It was a grain like no other
she sang the coolest of melodies to my ears
Serenaded my hearts
Captured my soul
Made my spirits soar
My megalomania mellowed when I realized her suss
I took her in, and here is the fruit of my womb
A CHEST OF FRUITS
A festoon of shiny dark hairs curled like a noodle
Resting on an enlarged cashew
Two black and glowing stones dwelling between two peeled eggs
A schnozzle protruding like a carrot
Two strawberry-red slabs unleashing a radiant smile
An antagonistic arraignment of bleached heterogenous grains
A slenderized stem running into 3 tributaries
With the midmost bearing two juicy oranges
Oranges that had sprouts
Irrigation washed through the style all the way to the pistil
The desire of every spermatocyte
Posteriorly lies a cottony lump gapped by a straight line
All of which are carried by two thin trunks
This is the woman,the one I love.
Find the art of our @itz_bigboiler here
*grabs dictionary*
Oya lemme read it again. *sigh*
I had to read it twice to unlock the methodology of the poem and I have to admit, I am amazed. Subtlety is a powerful weapon and the ability to disguise the erotic in the mundane, genius! Bravo!
Thanx bro.,much appreciated.
Haha!
I got to the end and had to go back up to read again…
If that was your intention, you totally got me!
X_X
Glad i did.lol
Ooh… Deisre of every spermatocyte ey.?
I love the eggs..and the carrot… And ofcourse,the tributaries 🙂
Thank you sis.
Line 4: “Serenaded my hearts”. Hearts??
Line 6: Spirits? How many you got?
This was unnecessarily complicated. Sucked the fun out of it.
What is the point of writing if 99.999999999% of your readers have the ‘WTF’ face after reading your work? You find consolation in the imaginary readers in your head?
You tried too hard.
You see,i’m not perfect. No one is,we only aspire to be.
Thanks for the criticism,its constructive.
Gracias!
Had to read twice before I could grasp that its a full description of a woman. This is ingenious. More elbow to your grease.
CHRIST….I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS…A WOMAN BEING DESCRIBED SO…I LOVE EVERY LINE,you amaze me oh..wish I could be this good.
Aww,thanx i’m humbled.
C’est Bon!
I Love it.
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